Where is the other side of the story
I don't think this is one of the greater ones. It's like reading a book and the auther goes and discribes the sunset. You my say that the author can only write about a sunset for a paragraph or a page.
But the author goes on for three pages discribing this one incedent and it gets boring.
What I'm trying to say is that you have gone to far with the details. write it and lets see the other side of the mountion.